Эссе по английскому: «Тема social techniques in manadgment на английском языке» заказ № 1944622

предмет:менеджмент 12-15 стр в Чехии клиент новейшие авторы в системе менеджмента, которые публикуются в журналах и книгах лит обзор. обхор не менее 40 источников стандартные состовляющие : цели методы, конструкция тема Social techniques in manadgment. Автор поймет. Свое эссе я прикрепила. я хочу не исправить свое эссе, а совсем новое написать замечание руководителя по старому варианта:Это замечания преподавателя.Hello Mrs. Israilova, thank you for submitting your study for the Management exam. I have read it through and I have got a few comments on it. Also enclose a copy with my remarks in the text and also highlighted text, which does not seem to be formulated correctly. 1/ The text submitted is not a review of literature as it was supposed to be ... It is a kind of mixture of compilation of various (mostly rather old fashioned) resources and your comments 2/ The text is divided into 4 parts: Introduction (where one would expect the explanation of the reasons, why you have chosen this particular topic ... which is actually not); The theoretical and methodological basis (where, in review papers should be the scope, selection criteria and procedure adopted in the preparation of the sources which will be reviewed; it is just one paragraph without any specification; one paragraph only is just too short to provide enough information about the way you have approached the topic); Discussion - usually this part follows after the findings, here apparently it is the findings, Conclusion - this should assess your findings against the objectives (again only a paragraph). And it does not as the study does not seem to have any objectives. 3/ Even review papers have their objectives - this would probably help you to stay in focus: the paper title brings to the attention Social Methods in Management ... but the paper does not deal with them ... I can hardly find any of these methods in the text (despite the fact, that we agreed upon a different topic ... but you may want to change, I do not mind) 4/ The use of literature: a) there is a citation norm ISO 690 you should be using, and you are not; b) 20 references is not many for this type of study - twice as much at least will be acceptable; c) only 1 out of the sources you have used, is younger than 15 years.... vast majority are very old publications; very little of the sources are the publications in high quality journals (one or two?) ... with the open access to major journals in the field provided to PhD students free of charge I do expect you to use them; d) a number of references is missing in the text. 5/ The paper would benefit from a clear definition of the topic .....and this would also help you with the choice of literature to be reviewed for this purpose. Overall: the paper does not meet the requirements for the Management exam. I would like to encourage you to re-write it (perhaps consult it with your supervisor) and re-submit it. Hello Mrs. Israilova, thank you for submitting your study for the Management exam. I have read it through and I have got a few comments on it. Also enclose a copy with my remarks in the text and also highlighted text, which does not seem to be formulated correctly. 1/ The text submitted is not a review of literature as it was supposed to be ... It is a kind of mixture of compilation of various (mostly rather old fashioned) resources and your comments 2/ The text is divided into 4 parts: Introduction (where one would expect the explanation of the reasons, why you have chosen this particular topic ... which is actually not); The theoretical and methodological basis (where, in review papers should be the scope, selection criteria and procedure adopted in the preparation of the sources which will be reviewed; it is just one paragraph without any specification; one paragraph only is just too short to provide enough information about the way you have approached the topic); Discussion - usually this part follows after the findings, here apparently it is the findings, Conclusion - this should assess your findings against the objectives (again only a paragraph). And it does not as the study does not seem to have any objectives. 3/ Even review papers have their objectives - this would probably help you to stay in focus: the paper title brings to the attention Social Methods in Management ... but the paper does not deal with them ... I can hardly find any of these methods in the text (despite the fact, that we agreed upon a different topic ... but you may want to change, I do not mind) 4/ The use of literature: a) there is a citation norm ISO 690 you should be using, and you are not; b) 20 references is not many for this type of study - twice as much at least will be acceptable; c) only 1 out of the sources you have used, is younger than 15 years.... vast majority are very old publications; very little of the sources are the publications in high quality journals (one or two?) ... with the open access to major journals in the field provided to PhD students free of charge I do expect you to use them; d) a number of references is missing in the text. 5/ The paper would benefit from a clear definition of the topic .....and this would also help you with the choice of literature to be reviewed for this purpose. Overall: the paper does not meet the requirements for the Management exam. I would like to encourage you to re-write it (perhaps consult it with your supervisor) and re-submit it. Yours sincerely,